Snoink

Yes! We're twins. :D Two cakes! (Hopefully!)

Guessed I made em a bit too muscular, huh? I wanted her to be muscular, though. Soft sleek legs are for the tender. Yeah, but her legs look like they ...

But Snoink is too busy bouncing on walls because OMG. CAFFEINE! SUGAR! AHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!

New thread here: Go there if you want to join. *Locked*

I actually don't like the rhyming. I would prefer to see what you've written that isn't as forced as this. ;) But really. Some of the words you used aren't ...

This is a poem that deals with "navel-gazing." That is, it deals with the narrator's emotions and nothing else. Try extending your metaphor to stretch and encompass the world instead ...

This, for me, is all plot and no characters or action. Add some action! What happens during the fight scene? You have a brief introduction of who Jag is, but ...

Don't get eaten by zombies! :o

"Pretty good! CLASSES ARE OVER! HOORAY!" *steals some root beer float from Sage*

Snoink sauntered in. "Can I have a tall glass of strawberry soda?"

Okay! I liked it! General comments.... 1. Red sucks. Change it to black. :P 2. Mention the name "Marie" earlier. It was kind of confusing. 3. How old were these ...

The shading on her legs is kind of... weird. Choose a less strong color so it doesn't look like she has old legs.

I liked the beginning and I liked how it had such a surreal feeling to it. Yet... I feel like I didn't really have any meaning to it. I mean, ...

*checks dictionary* Hehehe... Iz iz gud at zpelling! Still! American: realize English: realise

It's fun playing with indents, but I think that it would work better if you made it more of a dialogue. I mean, right now it's sort of like a ...