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Hehehe... it's time for a mad-lib critique! You know what that means. Fill in the spaces with the appropriate words and then see what this happens to your critique. Remember ...

Read this: WTF ... Please do not imitate this. The ending is too "omgthedooropenedbutshedidn'tseethemanoutside"-esque. Basically? Don't tell the readers, "OMG, LOOK! SEE??? THERE'S ACTION EVENTUALLY!"

*comes like a rain cloud* Okay, this time I'm not going to comment on the grammar or spelling. With that said, there ARE some grammatical errors, so you gotta watch ...

Hahaha... the MLA Squad is awesome.

Pulchritudinous? Pulchritudinous? No. This is one of those instances where you're trying to spend a hundred dollars for something that take ten cents. Try another synonym of beautiful. Just not ...

Hello and ( once more) welcome to YWS! The first thing you want to do is check your spelling. I don't really want to waste my time on that, so ...

Hehehe... romantic fiction. I used to avoid that place because I had never fallen in love, but things have changed recently, lol. I'll take a look at your stuff.

This was pretty and it reminded me of one of several worn places I had been to and absolutely loved. Though the others are right in that the conclusion wasn't ...

*moved to Fiction Discussion* I hated the circle of magic series, actually. It had too many POVs and I was quite confused. However, I loved her Lioness quartet. This, of ...

*Moved to Fiction Discussion*

Still, the lovely thing about this piece is it doesn't rely on the gender of Jean. ;) (And yes, I thought Jean was a girl too, lol.) Found something else... ...

Of course you should post the revisied edition here. That way, you don't have people critiquing the same thing five times.

Some others that haven't been mentioned yet... Catcher in the Rye - J.D. Salinger The Red Badge of Courage - Stephen Crane Fahrenheit 451 - Ray Bradbury Slaughterhouse Five - ...

Isn't it funny that Winston would rather read a stupid long boring book about Big Brother when there's a hot chick by his side and they're lying on a bed ...

The ending should be "then" not "then." That typo just... slaughters the poem. O_o Anyway, I think at this point you're using too many adjectives or simple words to support ...