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I like my writing, if only because I like my characters and anything with my characters is something awesome to me. But for my poetry, I tend to close my ...

This is where I blink rapidly and wonder who the authors are of these books. *blinks rapidly* *wonders who the authors are* Anyway, I choose the bible. Because that is ...

Hehe, yay! I'm not alone! Somebody else who sucks at names is here. :) *huggles* Anyway, I too suck at last names, but I try to avoid them as much ...

Yes, it goes here. ^_^ Now... for the critique! The story was cool and the ending was pretty dramatic, so you get full points on that. I like how you ...

Ahhh... this is much better than the poem. As the others said, description is key in this story, especially in the setting. I know that, when I picture this story ...

Aww... poor Lynnie! Mind you, I think the introduction was a little bit too "woe is me!" but that could just be a preference taste, so whatever. In any case, ...

Heheh, yeah, the doctor annoyed me as well, but what struck me was how much he knew about everything, without being personally involved. It was kind of creepy. Could he ...

*moved to Lounge*

Right now, this is very very abstract. Why not write a poem that brings scenes from the real world into the abstract world? For instance, the only thing "real" in ...

Whoa, that's pretty sweet. What happened in the nightmare?

Very old school.. pretty cool! :D In the last stanzas, try to make it more concrete and see whether turning it from the abstract to the solid makes it different. ...

In the beginning, the line breaks do seem a little forced, but halfway through, they start to make sense. I'm just wondering: wouldn't it be better with the last word ...

This could probably be published in some teen magazine... I think. Except I don't read teen magazines, so maybe I'm wrong? Moving along! ;) The main thing I would say ...

Haha, Mesh and I look like we're the tallest in that picture. ^_^

I hate you. This story was awesome and gave me chills and even made me not want to read the ending of it, because I was scared what would happen ...