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Re: How on earth do you describe physical pain
Don't describe how it feels... describe what is happening. For example: The Beating The first blow caught me sideways, my jaw Shifted. The second beat my skull against my Brain. ...
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Re: rEal eMotion (Jade)(The letters are SUPPOSED to be that way)
If this is not your work, then please do not put it in literary forums. >< And it's supposed to be "falling in" not "far beneath." *moved to Poetry Discussion*
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Re: Only in America...
Psh, it's simple. Buy sixty hot dogs and sixty buns. Then it'll be okay. LCD FTW!
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: Writing Habits
I write naked. Um... just kidding. I don't think I have many writing habits. I do have many habits that involve procrastinating from writing though! ^_^
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: Crimson Tears from this Borken Heart- coming back parade
Ah yes, a poem about S&M. Lovely. This is a classical example of navel-gazing emo poetry. Try to go beyond the narrator's viewpoint, and I'm sure it will be something ...
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: Um... (peeking over shoulder)
Nosy parents? :P Nah. My dad doesn't even know about FREAK, or even the title. It's kind of funny, actually.
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: Whispers of the Fallen - Chapter One, Part 2
Meh, there's something missing with this, and that means that I'll have to pummel you because it's part 3 that's missing and why, why, WHY did you post this without ...
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: Whispers of the Fallen - Chapter One, Part 1
I don't know. Tess's character doesn't make sense. If she usually is a party animal, why would she be so quiet on the sidelines? I mean, we get the feeling ...
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: Dr. Weisberg
Aha! First of all, if you want to have critiques on this, you MUST seperate this into paragraphs by making a space between each paragraph. Then it's easier to read ...
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: I don't want to sound too arogant, but...
Ask people! :D Contrary to popular belief, mind-readers do not exist and though we have a general idea that you might want critiques, a request is always nice. But yeah. ...
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: Only in America...
XD
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: Ardèche
XD I love Brad. Anyway, I can see why this is supposedly great and I can appreciate the lack of words and the strange meanings they come up with, but ...
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: Chicken Fried Rice
I'm just going to comment on the grammar a little bit. The first paragraph has WAY too many run on sentences. So spit up the sentence and it should be ...
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: Young Writers Literary Journal: Coming In Print Soon!
Wait... so you CAN'T publish anything that you've put on YWS?
Aug 6, 2007 -
Re: Have you ever wondered what an Inkblot talks about?
Oh dear... lol. We have a couple of FBI members, but you're one of our first CIA ones! ;) Anyway, I've always wondered what an inkblot thinks about. Can you ...
Aug 6, 2007