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The boy who’s intelligence is well-used, It's not "who's" (which is a contraction for "who is") but "whose" which means it's possessive. ^_^ I love the title of the poem, ...

If it's a riddle, don't tell us what it is. In fact, don't even say, "What am I?" We should be able to determine that this is a riddle with ...

At the moment, this is kind of repetitious. You keep telling us that the narrator is tired, but you really don't tell us why or give us any reason why ...

(I told you it was good.) :P

WHENCE! You are supposed to post all the parts TOGETHER. I mean, I like to have points and everything, but still! You post them together so that we can make ...

Hahaha, just keep it an arcrostic and, for those in the know, they can giggle, and for those who don't know French *waves hand frantically* they can flail around until ...

If you didn't want us to critique it, you should have put it somewhere else. ;):P Anyway, I think a good title for it (a better one than "Doesn't have ...

Haha... strangely enough, this thread has been revived when I have to revise a character death scene and make it more realistic. O_o My two cents? Hysterical characters are hard ...

“I did not do it,” he whispered. This is the first time he doesn't say, "I didn't do it!" Make it important. Italicize "not" to have a greater effect. Anyway, ...

Ahhh! You can't leave it on this cliffhanger! I mean, it looks as if it's going to be more to the story, and then it just... stops. And that's not ...

Math tutor. I work 10-15 hours a week and get $9.10 an hour. I could get more if I work independently, but oh well! :D

Um... first of all, welcome to YWS! Second of all... you mean how to write romances? What attributes from the other person do you like? Why do you like the ...

*moved to Writing Tips*

Hahaha, just bug Nate, Firestarter, or Mesh. They'll be able to change it to most anything you want, provided the name hasn't been taken. ;) And you might not be ...

May I press my fingers firmly on your neck? As your skin rubs off on mine? Just a quick thing... I would make the first question mark a comma. Otherwise, ...