Snoink

*is flagged* Moved to the lounge!

Unfortunately, this poem is too true. *stabs 43* With that said, I think the second line is a little wordy and I would probably trim it a little. I think ...

Pat!

Aw shucks. You took it down. :( Well, I'm going to lock it as it's not really a story now, but if you want to post it back up, feel ...

Seventh, stupid, redundant, immure, bantering. Yes. We hate that very much. This is better than your previous work, but it's still not good and you're not putting as much effort ...

The rhymes are forced and, because you are concentrating on rhyming so much, there is no meaning behind the poem. Throw this away and try again. You can do better.

I don't think this works. I mean, first of all, you're telling us this. And, from the description you give us, we're supposed to feel sorry for the girl. Unfortunately, ...

Hahaha... I play Word. O_o *is lame*

Hahaha... there should be a mudwrestling contest between SPEW, CCF, and Big Brother. I wonder who would win...

You're doing it right! :D

SPEW gets its own song! :o I can't wait to listen to this! :D

Hmmm... are you talking about the dimensional analysis that means putting your stuff in fractions and then multiplying it to each other? In any case, figure out what you want ...

Because I've been getting these questions, I figure I would answer them really quick and if you see them, great, and if you don't, too bad. 1) Have you published ...

Aww... this is kind of sad. The only thing that really bugs me is that it seems to go from first person to third. So... is the narrator of the ...

You're trying to hard to stretch the metaphor. Instead of letting us, the lovely readers, decide that the metaphor of the wet flowers and ropes represent a lost virginity, you're ...