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I liked it. ^_^ The only thing I didn't really like were the last two lines: he compresses the makings and offers me his creation. I think you can do ...

Adam! ^_^ You can hear the critique here: And you should probably bug Adam with a critique too. He's trying to get published! :D

I always knew that Daniel had vanity issues. Aw... but we love Danny! :D

:D Awesomeness! Of course, it doesn't hurt that it's a pig...

Aye, this is in outline form, almost painfully so. It's in the traditional fairytale form, but without the flourishes that I miss. :) And all the names together are sadly ...

OH. MY. GOSH. XD You must have been very very very very very VERY bored! But I think I like it when you're bored. You should totally write more. I ...

I like your dialogue. A lot. The conflict really comes out and I feel sorry for Hikari. But, while this is a lovely story, I don't think the play format ...

Wait... aren't "bitches" females? Why are you refering to this guy as a bitch? Or maybe you got the wrong gender? It's kind of confusing.

Wait... is this going to be a poetry piece or...?

Okay! I must ask... how exactly did this poem kill a spider? XD But this poem is... weird. It reminds me slightly of a Beatles song in which John Lennon ...

*Moved to Nonfiction*

Hehehe, you know I love you. ;) The dialogue between the girls sounds exactly like that -- dialogue between girls. I don't see them as being women, which is kind ...

Awww... this is so cute! I think this is my favorite poem from you so far. But that will probably change as you get more sophisticated and awesome. ;) But ...

Oh my gosh, I should be doing homework.

I didn't comment on this? I thought I did! Shame on me, lol. Anyway, I think it's cool how you can just say, "Oh, this is one of my old ...