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The past tense of lie is lay. :P "He put a finger over her lips and shushed her like you would a child." I would write something... anything else. In ...

A fantasy/ghost/mystery story. The noble girl escapes to a primitive tribe, has to live with them, and realizes that ZOMG, she fits the prophecy profile perfectly, which means she is ...

...you have to admit, it is pretty funny. :D

(Yessssss...)

Eh, I've seen you do better. This is too dramatic and I really don't see myself being in the "you" position, so it's ineffective. And the character development does NOT ...

Awww.... I can sort of sympathize with J.K. Rowling! I have some characters in some of my stories who are gay, but I doubt I can go fully into their ...

Watch TV when you're writing it. It'll distract you from thinking about the rape scene, and you might get something pretty creepy and original when doing that.

Awww... you know I love you, Sureal. But this is a tough love critique. The poem is pretty, but towards the end it just rambles on at length about confusion, ...

For FREAK, I cut out this guy named Michael because he was basically stupid and irrelevant and horrible in twelve different ways. Then I put in Daniel, who served the ...

Actually, I heard that the polar opposite of love is indifference. Which sort of makes sense, if you think about it. Because hate is passionate... if he hates Jews, then ...

MY TEEN ANGST FILLS ALL. WOE IS ME.

You have a completely amazing story and I am so glad that you are doing wonderfully now. :D

Oh yes, a very secretive organisation ;) Lol. Obviously. ;)