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It's a conspiracy, I tell you! A conspiracy!

Eek! Ulcers are so cute! *desires*

Eek, you're trying much too hard to rhyme. If you can't rhyme, then don't. :P The wheel continues on,

Ooooh... some really nice stuff in here. Actually, I think the third stanza would be the best starting point for this. So: If my long lost memories were dyed purple, ...

Aw, you know I love you! Otherwise, I wouldn't give you such a critique. ;) Anyway! Continuing onward! The light that was shown, Was only the dark, You do realize ...

YES. YOU SUCK. No, really, why ask such a question like that? XD We don't answer questions like that here, really. Our purpose is to help you get better. Yes... ...

Hehe, I think it's not your best. :P It's more of a rant with line breaks, really. I would rather have more substance on it. Which I know you can ...

Nice idea! And I liked the title. It was very succinct, but that's a good thing. :P Be careful about all the "ands" you have in here. So I would ...

What is this referencing? Because right now it seems to be referencing a "Goddess" figure, and I'm not quite sure you wanted that. Besides, some of the lines don't really ...

This uses too many adjectives to really do justice to the scene. You have a bunch of movement -- it's playtime, no? So don't clutter it up with three adjectives ...

This is what we like to call "a paragraph." Please, next time post a story or at least something a bit more continuous than this.

Solving it:

And then... the magic. I find that colors can sometimes make things apparent to me, so hopefully it's that way for you too. Sometimes, black and white doesn't work. So ...

And yes, PLEASE notice the equal sign in between them. I've found CALCULUS students, for goodness sakes, decide that they were going to do cross-multiplication without the equal sign in ...

Solving it algebraically. :P And yeah, I know some people who can't understand cross multiplication but can do algebra quite fine, so I'm showing you these both ways, just to ...