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When you first start out, you say, "I don't know why" about the brother's gun, so it seems random when he starts shooting people. Also, even though it's written in ...

This is a incredibly repetitious poem. It repeats the same idea again and again, slamming the message mercilessly in the reader's face. Try coming up with a specific event to ...

*Moved to Fantasy Fiction*

I think it would be cool if there were different breeds of werewolves. ^_^

She was only 11 years old when he found her Her youth showed in her eyes

First time. Lead by a hand, through a door. Sh-sh-shaking, so nervous, nails nibbled raw. Mind racing, heart pounding.

Unwilling to leave, Yet unable to stay.

*Moved to The Lounge*

Awww... I was looking forward with kicking out Nate! Oh well...

The most awesome, amazing character of all were Lena's breasts. They were characterized incredibly well. ^_^ And yay! SPEW will take over the world some day...

I can look at it, but if I think about it too much, I start freaking out.

Finished as in you finished the first draft or finished as in, "I'm ready to publish now"?

Haha, you're one of my favorite Honorary 11-year-olds! :D

Finally!

Page 3! :D