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Geep, the first chapter was very confusing, so if that was your intention, then you did perfectly. 1) About Scarlett, you say this: That was my goal throughout high school ...

The conflict in this poem is all about the secrets that the mountain keeps. Unfortunately, it seems like you don't give us a hint about the secrets, instead talking about ...

This has some pretty good stuff in it! :D Since you seem to be pretty adept at poetry, the thing I would try next is to play with formatting. Right ...

Just a quick reminder: you don't have to write an introduction explaining your poem. I'm pretty sure that is one of the reasons why this poem hasn't gotten as many ...

Some fabulous stuff here! :D I won't rant about how awesome some of the stuff is in here, because I think you know, but I do have two qualms. The ...

I love the idea of the first line. I would write it as: Every tear I cry for you slips down my cheek and makes a little puddle on the ...

I think This poem goes on too long. No, seriously, right now it's a little bit scattered. Look at all your points and decide which ones are more important to ...

I think if you took this part out: You left me because you never saw What I was when you were gone We were in love but now your gone ...

Ugh... usually I'm a fan of your poetry, but this seemed to have too many adjectives for its own good. Better luck next time? ;)

First of all, this totally reminds me of romantic fiction, not dramatic poetry. I mean, yeah, it has line breaks, but poetry is very concise, very rhythmic, and this doesn't ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! First of all, you're going to want a title. Using the standard, the first line of the poem is the title, so you can change ...

This seems to be a very sarcastic piece of writing to me, as if you're almost mocking the girl that seems shy so that she appears to be something more ...

...I've seen worse. :P

Because my family are very suscepisiable drinkers. It's an addiction within my blood and it had split my Dad's side of family in death. I believe if you believe you ...

It's not a matter of age really, it's a matter of life experiences. If you two don't have similar life experiences, then it won't be an even match and you'll ...