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At this point, I'm really really really hoping that you have a broadband connection. Why? Because I have a present for you. :3 Despite my modish appearance, I am actually ...

Geep. The last stanza is by far my favorite... though you gotta admit, it's quite a horrible way to die. :? Anyway! Good stuff here.

Geep! I think you can make this poem awesome! Right now, you're using descriptions and stuff, telling us about the pathway. The pathway has a misty maze, etc. But! That ...

Nice :) Just one thing... The first stanza is saying Take my words... but the second is saying the opposite... Ignore me . Was this intentional? Yes. ^_^

Psh. I saw that technology five years ago! :D

I don't approve. ^_^

LOL, when I write about a perfect character, I write about myself. ;)

Notes for me... and maybe you? In any case, here you go!

This is a slightly hilarious poem, but if you want anybody to take it seriously, you're going to have to add more. :)

YWS decided to die, just as I wrote a comment for this. So, five million days later, I'm commenting! Yay! This is cool. I loved it and it was funny ...

My inner feminist inside of me is tempted to scream. This is such a shallow representation of a woman... especially of a beloved woman. It really doesn't say anything, just ...

Yes... and research! The people don't magically become your agents... they are professional agents already. While you're editing your novel, look up and find out as much as you can ...

O_o This is soooo disturbing.

The voice in the head part is kind of scary. I mean, it implies that the girl goes crazy and skitzo and that solves her problems? What sort of message ...

Ugh! I hated the imagery! Any mention of surgery and cutting makes me feel twitchy. Don't ask... it involves an almost-tragedy with me and a chainsaw. Slightly traumatizing... Anyway. That ...