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Aha! We love new stories. :) Since this a new idea and you envisioned it well, then I won't bother with the nit picky stuff. There are a couple of ...

Dude, that's why they had the bird cage things over the holes... it was just a trap! It's sort of like when I visited San Francisco, and they had they ...

Squee! Dostoyesvsky has recently stolen my heart as well, but with "The Brothers Karamazov." I want to snuggle Alyosha.

Actually, I closed my eyes and picked the first avvie that my mouse thing landed on. :P

Ahhh... this poem is much better than the last one I critiqued. :) Two things! Heat touches your lips as breath gushes past. The taste of sweat is cool; rolling ...

I really really like the second stanza, since it's simplistic and pleasing. Your first stanza, however, has too many metaphors and it seems cluttered. Plus, it doesn't sound pretty. If ...

Is it possible to not include this in the story? I say this because it's really really long and it doesn't look like it would fit in a story, at ...

Hello Mally! :D So I read your poem and it sounds kind of snazzy. I can see what you're doing to make it sound confused. You love to make it ...

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It looks like it would be a lovely picture, but it is a little small. Do you a bigger version of the same picture to show us? :D

Big Brother is too busy stretching to think. :P

Okay, so I was visiting in a county fair, and a piggy sneezed on me and decided to ruin my pants. The only pair of jeans that actually fits me. ...

I used "to be" verbs in my writing often to give my MC, who is essentially a slave, a more passive voice. :)

Dude, I was *totally* impressed. :P Actually... that certain ripping of the story or poem may have been because of SPEW? We're an editing group that can act like a ...

Yay! I love ensemble pieces too... it makes me fall in love with the characters so much more easier. :) Although, if it's written well enough, big cast pieces can ...