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I can't wait for school! I get to go to uni for the first time and flail around in ridiculously hard courses which are only ten weeks long! :D

Your dialogue grammar is wrong -- listen to JFW. ;) I just wanted to give a quick comment: it seems like you're rushing a lot through these events. And that's ...

Courier, 12 pt, double spaced. It's actually easier to read like that. :)

Lucas sounds slightly sociopathic and it seems unlikely that he would give a second glance at Natalie, especially if they are the same temperament. You need to tweak the characters ...

Hm... this sounds a bit too much like Twilight. :?

When you start writing, you need to first get the words to match the scene. Don't worry about writing sentences yet... what you want to get the words out as ...

Haha... well, seeing as I don't like PotO, I can't see how it can be worse! :D

6.) Kylan. ;)

The "Paul is Dead" thing makes a lot more sense and has way more evidence than this. Therefore, Paul is dead. :) Also, "I buried Paul" is eleven letters. That ...

Er... background information and definitions, please?

This seems to want to be an inspirational message, but it doesn't really work with me. I'm used to reading these inspirational stories which are that--stories of people succeeding. It's ...

Hello! You totally reviewed my poem, so I guess it's only fair for me to do the same! :D I'm one of the tougher critics to please on YWS, so ...

Okay! So I was editing FREAK obsessively again, and I came up with the problem of foreign languages. Should you use foreign language in large quantities, even if they are ...

I like to make supernatural stories where magic comes from God, and since God is love, then magic would be within love. So you can't actually hurt anyone, or not ...

Okay! So I have a couple of questions for you... When you focus on your sentences, what happens? I'm an auditory learner, which means that I tend to "hear" what ...