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Hello Vivela! :D First things first, why do you capitalize the last word of every line? It's really distracting and it seems unnecessary! Okay, now for the poem itself! I ...

u kno ur a nerd cuz u rite lyke dis 2 anoy al teh eng majs who tink there nerds jst 2 c tehm sqim besids ur a inginering majr ...

Eek, no, I'm not sure if this would be better off as a poem! :) Stories (or poetry, for that matter!) should always have a purpose or sense of direction. ...

Instead of saying "Faulk," consider: "Faulking tap dancing elephants in pink tutus of the nth dimensional portal coming out to kill us why why why!" Good luck with nanowrimo! :D

Hey, cool it guys! ;) Anyway, as far as your poem... I was a bit confused by the reference of "Ithaka." To me, your epigraph seemed out of place and ...

And we neeeeeeeed more people with those stars, so don't be afraid to make the 1250 (or whatever) critiques it takes! It'll be awesome!

Thanks. I wrote it for class. (I didn't want to put the words "Gay-Discrimination" in it, as it was read out loud.) That makes it even more worse! How can ...

This may sound surprising, but each of these questions can be a complete basis for a new poem. Awesome, no? ;) It's great that you are asking all these questions ...

Nice! Very Shel Silverstein of you... I approve. :)

You start off strong and with attitude (which I always like) but then you started listing weird-sounding desserts, which was very off-putting. True, you had some commentary attached to the ...

Hey Kookie! When writing poetry, you want to catch your read off guard. Make them a little off-balance, surprise them with the power of your words... make them drunk with ...

You may consider just posting the text on YWS. It may get you more reviews. :)

This is awful. Its entire purpose as a poem is to preach and rant. It has neither introduction or conclusion. Worst yet, it flip-flops and uses imprecise language to persuade... ...

What I don't quite understand is what is the timing of this piece? Usually, in poems about trees, the trees get older and wiser, but this tree seems to be ...

This looks to be one of those works that you tried to make it sound all artsy because you made something slightly pretty and then decided, "Hey! It's too pretty! ...