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Sesame chicken! Lemon chicken! Sweet and sour pork! Broccoli beef! Chow mein! Chow fun! Fried Rice! Crab-filled wontons! Fried potstickers! And OMG. We have a gazillion Chinese food restaurants over ...

I saw this when I was older! I was scared because I thought they were going to ruin the book (I adored the book) but when I saw the screenplay ...

First of all! "It is therefore imperative for us g to adopt..." Random g! Now, the content... This is too vague to make any sort of valid argument. It consists ...

Kiss me this once and let's not confuse ourselves with terminology. You know what I want -- I want to squeeze your lips with my own, letting your strawberry lips ...

Don't bother with the prologue... just dive right into the story. It'll be better, honest. :D

I think you might be better with some consolidation here! You have a lot of different images thrown in, so you either have to combine them better so that they ...

Eek! If they give you a question, you have to answer it! The easiest way to lose is to not answer the question and then simply spit it out back ...

A rather dismal thought, but whatever! It's not really a story at all, so I won't bother you about the lack of conflict or whatever. However, there are several points ...

Typos! Instead of "boarderline" it's actually "borderline." Okay! Now the story! It seemed really... flat. We really didn't know about any of the characters or what their relationship was with ...

Hello anima! Welcome to YWS. :) When I read poetry, I tend to look for something that just intoxicates me with beauty, especially with something about autumn, which is a ...

Dun dun dunnnn! Dramatic cliffhanger! I fail to see how this is a romance story, but knowing how crazy Greek mythology can be, it's bound to come up! The black ...

Haha, for me, I used to do Animaniacs/Tiny Toons/Looney Tunes fanfics. Amazing stuff, lol. I also made lots of stories with pigs and horses. And there was that story with ...

Hello, sspgcc1! Welcome to YWS! :D First, a typo! "The servants, brining in food"

Now, if this did make sense, it would be soooo awesome. ;) One thing that I don't understand is the last line, "And all because green trees leap." The lines ...

Hi Elinor! First of all, you keep on changing tense. You slip in and out of past and present tense, and it makes it really strange! So fix that up! ...