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Okay, so generally I don't like to comment on style, however... you could probably combine some sentences and make this piece a lot more smoother and easier to read. Right ...

First! He's holding a rock that transforms into a gun? What?! Doesn't make sense! Second, it seemed rather strange. You have this really intense conflict where there is creepy guy ...

Fire needs a catalyst for it to work though, which makes it heavier than air automatically!

A hole But... that doesn't make sense! Seeing as you would have to make a hole in the barrel, you would first have to make it empty. Then, more then ...

Photons of the visible light spectrum!

Thanks Nate ! :D

No. Now, if he said another body part would grow longer...

So... um... I'm confused. From what I've heard in college, some people don't like cigarettes at all, but they do like weed. So... why exactly would the friend want to ...

Hey Kate! Nice to finally see your story! :D Okay! So the beginning of this story reminds me of my story. There are a couple of reasons why: 1) The ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! :D First of all, your use of "pelts" kind of threw me off a little, simply because pelts are from skinned animals. So... um... are ...

I like the idea, but the execution was rather poor, so let's talk about that. First of all, metaphors and similes. I know you love them. I love them too. ...

I claim this spot! ~ Whoa... 2009. What a year! First of all, thank you Nate for putting up with the evil, horrible things I put you through each and ...

Hello! Okay, so this may be geeky, but I totally read it for the title. Yep. Geeky. However, when you start with electrons, and when I was reading the first ...

EEK! You've written one of those "based off a fairy tale" things. I love those sorts of stories! Just one thing I found that I didn't like: "I shook her ...

LOL. Green elephants! This reminds me of a quote by Dostoyevsky: “Try to pose for yourself this task: not to think of a polar bear, and you will see that ...