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Hey Sachi! So yeah... you have a nice, clean style which is always a pleasure to read! However, a couple of rather major things irked me about this piece, so ...

Oh gosh... paper. I just spent all day cleaning out the paper in my room, and it's still not gone! It's terrible. It's especially pathetic because if I want to ...

Welcome back to YWS! :D

Yay! You got to love those dancing elephants! They're like... the best part of the site. Nah, just kidding. The best part about the site is the community and the ...

Yay! People who write since they were six or eight generally are awesome writers, and I'm sure you're no exception. It'll be nice to read your work! :) What sort ...

Hey, welcome to YWS! :D So you're one of those creative people, huh? ;) That's really cool! I wish I had ten ideas buzzing about in my mind constantly. Sadly, ...

Hmmm... interesting story! :) It's really hard to see which one you should do without both the third and first person excerpts! However, as somebody who had to rewrite an ...

Eek, unnecessary dialogue, lol! I'm also a big culprit of that... it's rather sad! What's worse is that, when you're a culprit of unnecessary dialogue, this unfortunately means you have ...

Hi colorful! Welcome to YWS! :D So, basically, you know how to write vivid images, which is a great! Now, what you want to try to make the vivid images ...

Haha, yes! I second the very good for the first poem bit. :) One thing I love to see in poetry is lots of metaphors and stuff... it's kind of ...

Hi Vampy! :) The main thing that I wondered about in this poem was about the narrator. At first, I figured that the narrator could be God, but since it ...

You should do something entirely different. ;) So he should already know how to fight, but in one of his fights, he should break an arm or something, making him ...

Also! See, my servant will act wisely; he will be raised and lifted up and highly exalted. Just as there were many who were appalled at him— his appearance was ...

I have to say! My favorite part about it was the attic boarding and stuff. Not quite sure what you did, but I love the grainy feel of the wood. ...