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Hi Aristotle! :D I would probably get rid of the prologue... it tells the reader what to expect, but as a reader, I would rather read something with tons of ...

The problem is, I could ask those questions... but more likely than not, the only question I wonder is, "Why should I care?" Don't spoon-feed your readers... but do give ...

Awww... romance! :D Try to avoid the pitfall of describing every single little thing about your characters... it's better to describe them in increments rather than describe them in a ...

Strong statements should be that -- strong. But this is so ambiguous and vague that it's hardly such. Without your explanation, it would have meant absolutely nothing to anyone... and ...

Hey Howler! I rated your piece 16+ because it has the word "fuck" in it. :) Interesting premise! I like well-crafted reflection scenes that really make it so that we ...

Layla! You got me at my knees... Okay, no more Eric Clapton references. :D This poem has a weak start! Because this a poem that is essentially about rape, it ...

Hey! You asked me to look at your poem again. Anyway, when I said what I did, I mean you need to condense it into the bare minimum and to ...

What I live - Is more real then you'd ever dream

Hehe, cute poem! :D But one question... marshmallow peeps? Isn't that a candy for Easter instead of St. Valentine's Day? Or did the Peeps company expand to give out heart-shaped ...

Hey Matt! :D It seems like in your poem you use lots of repetition and such of the same image over and over again. But this can get rather boring. ...

Pig! :D

Five to fifteen minutes. If it takes any longer, I am severely distracted.

@Galerius.....? DON'T ASK.

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I had two mild concussions that I fully recovered from. The last one was a couple of months ago, actually! I didn't lose consciousness or anything. But for a couple ...