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One more reasons why people who are 20+ should not be trusted.

THE VISIT: [Mr.Name], one of the senior-level employees at [comp.name] met us at the reception. We were instructed to follow their orders carefully and not to touch their heavy machinery ...

Er... I'm not done yet! I have to go to class! But here is what I have so far. You tend to be far wordier than you need to be ...

Nate... is there any way you can send mass messages about all this? I don't come on here as often as I used to... The problem is, for every one ...

Hey VitaminCakes! You asked me for a comment like... three or four times now, so I figured I would. :P Anyway, while I'm not a photographer or anything, these were ...

YOU'RE CRAZY. No... seriously... you should probably let a friend read your novel or something. That way, you'll get used to it when you finally publish it and become a ...

Hey Mo! :D One thing that you might consider when you edit is to make this more concrete! Right now, the description is very thought-based... you're not actually describing real ...

Hey Mr. Spaceman! :D So, Eli was right! Your sentence structure needs to be spruced up. Try combining sentences or starting with other words besides pronouns... it might make things ...

Loved, loved the title! :D One thing that I want you to try... you have a lot of lines and some of the lines and descriptions can be a bit ...

LOL! That's awesome! The ocean is freezing in Washington! I've been there and usually I'm in the poofiest jacket possible... it's really cold. And when the water gets in your ...

Eek! I really, really like this little smidgen of dialogue! It's very interesting! Plus, the people sound like they genuinely know and can converse with each other which is fabulous! ...

Teehee, curly hair? You must be speaking of someone else! ;) But no! Some really good imagery here! My favorite was little piggies snuffling around... that verb, snuffling, made me ...

Hahaha! The dancing elephant is cute, but I would lose that and the whole *walks away smugly* part in serious poetry. ;) As far as your poem goes, right now ...

Eek! Your username is sooooo cute! And I demand a comic book! That's the coolest thing anyway... cool illustrations, awesome characters... writing pales in comparison! :D Also... swimming? In Washingt

Mr. Knightly and OverEasy>> Calm down. Circular reasoning is by far a lesser fallacy than personal attack.