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Hey Ross! So, you're writing lyrics! Yay! :D Now, for the first verse, it seems really really cheesy. I don't know. I like the chorus and how it runs, but ...

Hey ninjacookiemonster! :D (And yes, I love that name.) I think this isn't really an excerpt as much as it is a query! Which is fantastic, really... I'm attempting to ...

Considering that you just viciously killed a leaf in the name of science, why not talk about it in scientific terms? No, it doesn't have eyes... but it does have ...

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Next time, bug somebody in green. We can unlock it for you. :) Anyway... there is this damsel lying in this grass with lots of insects whizzing around. She's been ...

Hey talkingbird! Interesting beginning! I like the language and the way you bring us into the characters' lives. Now, my main suggestion here is to describe more about Maggie. In ...

Hey Ninja Cookie Monster! :D One thing that I would really like to see in this is a description of Seth! Not necessarily a physical description, mind you, (though you ...

Snoink, that's a really odd bug. It had something to do with the: [center][/center] tag because when I edited those out, everything work. Then I added them in again to ...

Dude, I read the bow and arrow bit, but when I went to reread it, I thought I was hallucinating. XD If he's far away from her, there's no way ...

Eek! That sounds too fun! Next time, I want to go! D: He's the Prokaryotic organism in the bioreactor (aka, E. coli) and I am the gloved hand. Two by ...

Fries! A story! *pounces!* Now! For the story! First, the annoying scientist in me wants to remind you that it's pretty hard to outrun a bear. And out climb a ...

Hey guitargirl! Interesting way of formatting your story! I find it strange that she would be so open with her brother, but hey! Whatever works! Now, my main suggestion would ...

Hey Jester! At first, I was like, "Awww, what a sweet poem!" and then I kept reading it and my eyes widened. A suicide poem made from a butterfly? It ...

LOL! Hey Blair! Um... good question! I was always bad at introductory posts myself! You should probably talk about how you came on to YWS, what types of writing you ...

You look very wet!