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Re: No Man's Land
LOL. If this were in WW2, this would never happen. They were too... I dunno. Hateful of each other? ;) Anyway, as far as stories go, I think I would ...
May 6, 2010 -
Re: Penetrating the Pale Horse (2)
Cap'n! First of all, would you like me to move these to Fantasy Fiction novels? Right now, they're in short stories. Just figured I would give you a chance. ;) ...
May 6, 2010 -
Re: John McCain
Hey Jester! Two things! First of all, this poem doesn't really have a great rhythm. Yes, the rhyming is a wee bit off, but it's not bad. The problem is ...
May 6, 2010 -
Re: Report A Site Bug
I was getting it on all the main pages, such as the home page, the main blog page, the community forums. I forget whether the file downloaded if I browsed ...
May 6, 2010 -
Re: Report A Site Bug
Nate! I'm on another computer. I'm on Safari V. 4.0.5 on Mac OS X V. 10.5.8 Anyway! This file keeps on downloading to this computer whenever I go to another ...
May 5, 2010 -
Re: I am me.
Hey Emmy! :D First of all, welcome to YWS! Now, for your poem! Your poem is highly tautological. But I want more! Unless you are into tautology (which is entirely ...
May 5, 2010 -
Re: Chevrolet
Hey Pen! First of all, was this intentional? "Like your arm around my waste." Because I think "waist" would be more appropriate here, but I'm not sure if you're trying ...
May 5, 2010 -
Re: A Girl
Hey Kah! First of all, fabulous drawing to do without any looking! I would love this artistic skill. :) Now! The nose is really small, which looks funny since it's ...
May 5, 2010 -
Re: Trust
Yeah, I think this would definitely work as lyrics. Of course, you would need to add more to it if it were lyrics, because obviously you would need a longer ...
May 5, 2010 -
Re: You Don't
Hey talentedwriter! :D There's this one poem I read about someone who complains to this poet that all he writes is about depressing stuff. It's called, Terence, this is stupid ...
May 5, 2010 -
Re: Words
Hey hobbit! I really like the idea that you had about words leaving scars beyond all recognition... it's really powerful! I think that you should develop this idea a lot ...
May 5, 2010 -
Re: Why won't you write me a love song?
Hey Hydey! Okay! To avoid any confusion, I'm going to call "he" the person you're writing about and "you" the narrator. Just because. Anyway, a quick note, but right now ...
May 4, 2010 -
Re: Fire
Hey kingolions! So! You're writing about fire... neat! There's lots of imagery that you can use and you can really make this poem awesome. :) My first suggestion is to ...
May 4, 2010 -
Re: May Day
Hey BFG! So I read this poem and, on the whole, I really like it! The imagery is fantastic and I loved the way you brought in the other senses ...
May 4, 2010 -
Re: Zombie Attack
Happy sushi! :D First of all, a little typo! who's brains
May 4, 2010