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Hey Allison! Welcome to YWS! Hopefully, you'll get settled down soon and start feeling comfortable enough to comment on other people's works. :) Anyway, I found this really abstract! In ...

Hey THsavedme! Welcome to YWS! :) One of the things that I think you can expand on for this poem is the ambiguity of it! What is consuming her? What ...

We've had several mentorship programs on YWS, all of which have failed miserably once the mentors get bored of being a mentor and the leaders get bored of artificially enticing ...

Friiiiiiiiiies! You posted somehing! :o Abyway, you did make it shiny! But it looks like there is writing on the shiny part and it looks a bit strange... maybe it's ...

Hello sillyducky! I think you should start with the third stanza, actually, and get rid of your first two stanzas. They seem a little unnecessary! Also, and this may just ...

It's true! It's what my signature says, after all... where there is true charity, God is present! :D Unfortunately, God doesn't really seem to exist in this world... we messed ...

Hey imagine! :D One thing I would really like is if you could delve into the drama of this poem. Like, you hint of a forbidden love, but you don't ...

Hey Space Pirate! :D I kind of like this! It's a neat setting! One thing I would really like is more of a story. That is, you got the story, ...

Hello XJ! :D This seems like a rap more than a poem! Not that that's a bad thing... it just is, lol. Anyway, I would really like to see a ...

Hey Brooklyn! :D I kind of want to read the sequel where the guy would be totally suspended for inappropriate conduct, lol. Anyway, I find it highly unlikely that she ...

this poem is akin to stop and go traffic. I cannot tell you how difficult reading this poem is because I keep feeling like I'm jerked around so that the ...

I don't think bread knives are that good for killing people, actually. :P That aside! I think you can shorten the five stanzas that you have currently to something else ...

Hi silented! I think I would get rid of the first and fourth stanzas. They're just too cliched! Even if you removed on of t hem, the other one would ...

Actually, we like to follow an 18:1 ratio. ;) Nah, just kidding! Nice to see you here! If you need any help with writing reviews, I'm a reviewing monster and ...

Haha, this is a cute poem. :) I want to write a poem here