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Hi Kafka! :D I like the second story better! It has more of an ironic feeling to it, which I kind of adore. The only thing that could possibly make ...

Hey Drecka! :D First of all, you'll want to run a spell check on this! There's a couple of errors in here. ;) Now, for the actual story commentary! :D ...

YAY! This is original and new and innovative and I kind of adore it. :) Just a couple of thoughts or first impressions... 1. I don't like the title. It's ...

Hi Amberla! :D It is short! But short doesn't have to be bad! Still, I have some ideas on how you can expand it... ;) For one, I am a ...

I grew up listening to Rush Limbaugh. I learned from him to question everything, regardless of what people actually said and learned to look at people's actions to things. He ...

Hm... this may be just me, but I am pretty curious as to why this poem came out. It seems pretty confrontational (which I like!) and I am quite curious ...

It's short! ...Nah, don't worry, that wasn't all I was going to say! :D It's a good start, but I would like to see this expanded, if only because I ...

Hi Katie May! I think this might be really cool if we knew that she was dead from the onset. I mean, that would add the whole SHOCK factor and ...

Hi! I actually like the non-silhouette picture of Millie best. She's a cool cat, she is! I think these photos could probably do with some more contrast, especially the last ...

Haha, I figured as much! But see, what you do first is a free write where you just puke out your emotions on paper. Then you start to construct the ...

Teehee! When I was thirteen, I was awful at placing commas too. :) With that, you'll definitely want to learn where to put commas and such! Anyway! What you're going ...

Hey MilkNCookies! :D Cute story! And a promising introduction besides. :) This reminds me of modern day children's books... and trust me, I love those, lol. Now! Just a couple ...

Right now, you need to figure out what is important about this poem and what isn't. You're throwing all these visual cues toward us as a somewhat hodgepodge of information, ...

Right now, you need to figure out what is important about this poem and what isn't. You're throwing all these visual cues toward us as a somewhat hodgepodge of information, ...

You need to stress the conflict more to give this poem a little more interest. Right now, it seems very bare bones, which isn't altogether bad, but the problem is ...