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Er... poetically, it's nice. But there's one line that the essayist in me is screaming about. "and a chorus that impounds your heart - move your feet" It changes tenses! ...

10/10 Calvin turned into a tiger! CUTE!

10/10 because it makes fun of Carrie. XD

Wow... this has become popular. For a second, I must admit, I thought I may have my chapter one comments on this story and vice versa, which would have been ...

What if the mother was unable to care for him, so the grandparents took care of him instead?

8/10 because Google rocks!

Okay, I've looked it over. I'm not going to bother you with all the grammar mistakes, but I will tell you this. You have a lot of comma splices or ...

AHH! WHY DO YOU TYPE SO SMALL?????????????? *grumbles and copies and pastes it on Word*

^ Makes me twitch. *twitch*

STYLE Okay, first of all, the grammar stuff above was just how things are. This is me being a little nitpicker. So feel free to ignore any of the advice ...

^ Has complimented me. :shock:

She's in New Zealand. The rules may be different there.

8/10, because it's a catchy tune.

It's strange how much levels of emotions humans are aware of. We know fear, we know love, we know kindness, and it affects us greatly. If a father yells at ...

^ Knows Japanese!