Snoink

I like the first stanza the best because it's quick and short. Then the lines get longer. It seems a little bit more clumsily written... like you're going to a ...

Funny. :)

It's amusing though: you seriously have to take tests before Christmas? *laughs at all your misfortunes* Oh shut up... At least we're done now!

I... um... have a confession. I was surprised at the ending. I didn't know she was murdered, etc. Which really scares me because the YWS folks seemed to know it ...

I like it being specific. "Some people" is too vague and it doesn't sound realistic. Very interesting poem. It sounds very innocent, which leads us to be more sympathetic. IU ...

Geez... I don't watch anything older than silent films and I've never seen that. :? So out of touch...

^ Is following the star of Bethlehem, which is really weird because I haven't heard of that star or astrological phenomenon happening recently...

I know you're not interested in style changes, but would you like some suggestions about how you can put your guestbook inside the site?

Do you like long chapters or short chapters? Do you like novels that are divided in parts or not?

You're on! I hope you're writing your piece now... bwhahaha...

There's only one problem with that... I'm pretty sure the candy is as hard as rocks, and sticky too. :P

Are you using second person for a reason?

Not really. There's a pimple on his butt.

Aha! So this line clues it then: Killing in the name, of inconvenience and everything unsaid

I just haven't gotten very good reviews on my most recent poetry from my friends and our poetry club, so I was hesitant to post some of it here... Hehe... ...