Snoink

It's amusing. Kerosene in your veins? Your mouth is the spark? Does that mean that lover is a vampire and you are one of rare occurences of spontanious human combustion? ...

Please, please, PLEASE do not plagiarize anything. >< I've heard this years ago, when I was in elementary school... This may be a variant of it, but...

The metering is completely off, and the poem is too negative to have a really strong effect.

Well... it didn't work for me. You have to realize, I've been working on a "Choose your own adventure" kind of thing for a website, so... it doesn't affect me. ...

10/10 OMG! HE HAS THINGS COMING OUT OF HIS HEAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AWESOME!

3/10 Why the hyphens?

I like the first version better. It has more of a surprise element to it that makes it more tragically beautiful because of the innocence involved. This version seems a ...

Most Mature? Carmina Most Realistic? Gal Most likely to end up in jail? My dad... he works in the jails. XD Most likely to become president? Me. My papa told ...

Oops! I forgot to comment on this. What can I say? I first read this over Grif's shoulder. :P Anyway, I liked this much better than "Death of a Novelist." ...

Hehehe... voice #1 can't spell... My voices in my like to scream random obscenities. For Christmas, they've calmed down. The ones they're using now is "flaming imbecile," "complete and utter ...

LOL! This is funny. I mean... Um... I think knives are funny. The first verse is thoughtful, the second is hilarious, and the third is overflowing with question marks. Too ...

Yay! A limerick. :) I would suggest taking out the exclamation marks at the end, because they make the piece sound a little bit too enthusiastic, and it ends up ...

This line is a little awkward: "The music’s beat is all we need to get by" Also, you need to change the title so it doesn't say "Timline." But otherwise, ...

My two cents: The debate forum has never really... performed its task at all. Arguing, by itself, is a needed skill for writing because it helps structure and, yes, thinking. ...

Don't worry about sucking so badly that it shouldn't be shown here. You should write for yourself and yourself alone. If you want to develop your technique, come here and ...