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The devil looks fat, lol. Because you've made the buttons on his shirt go like "(" it makes him look very chubby. XD

Another thing... it's "Requiem."

It's interesting from the insane asylum point of view, but I found it a bit boring, and too jumpy. You go from one scene to the next without any real ...

I do it automatically when I'm writing, hehe. It's strange. So when I'm writing and am on a webcam, then people often wonder about my facial expressions... Which leads me ...

DOES ANYONE EVEN AKNOWLEDGE ME?!????!!!! Biggest attention whore: ummcowsareawesome ;) I second! :)

I liked this better, if only there was more emotions in it, which in turn made it easier to read. XD It actually flows nicely too. There's just a couple ...

The Prince picked his back foff the ground, dusted it off, and re-fastened the brass clips, then set the bag next to him and leaned his forehead against the window, ...

Hehe, not bad. :) This line sounds a little bit awkward though: "Of unkindly demise to go" I don't know... it just seems a little nonsensical. Perhaps you can find ...

She has rather big nostrils, don't you think?

Gah... you have such a dry tone. Why can't you be angsty and overdramatic like everyone else?

I reread this... it's still awesome. I mean... the word "beam" in the first line of the stanza... priceless!

I love your first stanza. Anything that has to do with chocolate cherries is a great stanza. However, the green eyed colors don't seem to match really. The second stanza ...

YAY! A POEM NOT ABOUT DEATH AND DESTRUCTION AND PEAS! Well... actually, there was a lot of destruction but... who cares! I liked this. The rhyming, most of the time, ...

Now there's only a couple of rhymes. Which means that, when there are rhymes, it makes that place seem awkward. Also the metering is off. And, usually I don't try ...

I like the introduction better. The introduction had a good start, a believable voice, and it sounded a lot more interesting. As soon as you got to the actual story, ...