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Awesome stuff, and, what's more, you stayed on topic! Good job. :)

Ooo! It has a lot of potential. :) First of all, I think this can have linebreaks where you put the commas. So it would look like this: Raspberry and ...

A rather avid modeler who did tons of stuff for World of Warcraft 3. He went to and specialized in modeling quite a bit. He also came up with tons ...

*bows or curtseys to Dusky*

So! What does anyone else think?

I told you your work was always worth waiting for. ;) Okay, grammatically, your guy was rather repetitive in this thoughts. There was one sentence that had anyway twice it ...

Wow... if you could do that in 45 minutes, you're skilled. ;) My main problem was that it was hard to read aloud. Try it... some of the words are ...

If someone is hopeless, they cant do the action right. John tells Jane, "You are a hopeless cause" while they were working on the automobile. That means Jane is completely ...

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You're welcome. :) When I say "abstract" I mean it isn't specific. Most of this description is transcendent. You use very specific details to make a place seem blurry and ...

And I would SOOOO critique this properly. ;) And now! An interview! Why did you start writing "The Bearer?" What effect did YWS have on you as far as completing ...

My favorite chapter is one. It just seems funnier. :) But all in all, the rush of words is fun. Perhaps you can even put this in poetry form for ...

As a writer, I don't do all of the work. You, as the reader, have to do some too. Interesting thought. One writer developed that thought even further. He was ...

It's okay. There are some parts where the symbolism gets overbearing. "The organ plays a surreal song, while reality waits at the doorways." In this line, the word "reality" sounds ...

Aw, thanks Sarah! It makes me feel warm and fuzzy inside. :) I've finally figured out whether the guy is drunk or not... finally. Revised version coming soon! And Shadowdancer, ...