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That's because it's a fragment. Remember this sentence? The cat ran in the rain. You're basically saying: The cat the rain. You need a verb in there that is telling ...

Chocolates?

"What makes you think it's not hiding?" would be the best actually, lol.

A stupid perv. :P But... I've cluttered my blog enough with that, lol. Better not clutter the entire forum. O_o

Pretty good! Because I'm unmerciless, I'm going to be nitpicky. “Ow,” he said. “That hurts!” This is where you need to use punctuation to make your words stronger. Even this ...

"And never think there own thoughts. " Not "there" but "their." Otherwise, an interesting poem. Well... it seemed more like a rant with linebreaks than an actual poem, but I ...

First of all, it's very hard to read, in Word and especially on YWS. It needs to be broken up into paragraphs. I think this is partly because the lack ...

Nice story! The main thing that is holding it up is the grammar, but grammar can be easily fixed. ;) The characters are interesting, and it is rather fun to ...

The first three stanzas are okay, but the fourth stanza makes the poem.

:P Well, this is the line that really bugs me: "Our pa e maker makes," What are you trying to say?

Welcome Ginny! You'll find plenty of awesome writers to help you out here. :)

AutophobeX49923 face didn’t show any change in emotion as he searched. Years spent without any direct human contact had rendered facial expressions and body language redundant. This was awkward and ...

^4/10 It makes fun of CSI! Although... I like NV better. Grissom is my hero. Strongbad: - Awesome site. ^_^ And you have to have 250 posts before you can ...

Even though I am STILL totally against them, Snoinkus...:P How do you decide when to split things into chapters/sections/whatever? Is there a certain, universally agreed-upon point to do it? Argh...th

Crossgender is a word I made up for writing really quick, because I had to leave right then. So! If it has another meaning that could be used for writing, ...