Snoink

So far, so good. Welcome to YWS! :)

Nice! I like the contrast of the colors - one being black but being described as white and likewise. Pretty stuff. :) And congratulations!

I like the four first lines -- CUTE! The rest of it was okay, mostly because I think it hinged on the borders of preachy and nonpreachy. But still, nice ...

You mean the music you wrote to this, or all the song titles you've lifted to make this? *sighs* I heard the news today, oh boy...

Interesting. :) I'm not going to go over grammar errors (there weren't many) but I will say this about your spelling: darkness and other forms of wordness have two s's ...

This is depressing. DEPRESSING!

*shudders* Thanks a lot for the help. It's kind of freaky... getting IDed by a tatoo with a number. Becoming a number instead of a human... weird. Does anyone know ...

There are definite grammar problems though, snoink, you should fix that up. Grammar problems? Nah... this is perfect. :P

Did you see them being herded Like little lambs? The little boys and little girls There they were brought out Into the blinking sun From the concrete walls they were ...

Ooooh... this is creepy. My favorite imagery is the part where the victim looks into the sky... beautiful stuff. Yet this is creepy all the same. Not in a bad ...

Er... grammatically, it's a travesty. But, strangely enough, it's funny. I think, if you want to seperate it in paragraphs that make sense and edit it, the story would look ...

:shock: Barely any spelling errors! COULD IT BE??? Sorry, I'm impressed. I did notice two typos, but they were relatively harmless things. Satting for hours listening to the howling wind. ...

I remember you! Welcome back! :)

I agree with Dusky. The Incredible Journey is an awesome story. Which one came first, do you think? 101 Dalmations (the book, mind you!) or that story? Hmm... You might ...

UPDATED: February 4, 2006