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Now the narrator, I dont know who is telling the story here, and i often have trouble finding the character i want to tell the story. Something im hoping YWS ...

youre right , im a terrible writer but ill still try untill im told im crap.then ill just give up. thanks for bieng honest, ill take more time making sence ...

But really... he does have his faults. He can't hold the angel. Did you see him sweating once he held it? I actually didn't notice that, mainly because I'm slightly ...

The Fourth Day – Wednesday, August 13th Our Journey into Hell I remember taking a nice shower. Let me tell you, it was nice. My shirt was soaked from my ...

While I like Kashmiel, he is a perfect character. Where's the faults? Does he at least twiddle his thumbs when he's thinking? Mortal or not, he should have some type ...

There was once a guy who wanted me to read his story, but would only let me read the story if I told him a personal secret. I cannot tell ...

I voted for the first one (though I liked the third one a lot). However, I like the outline better. It just looks nicer to me. If you don't want ...

Should we take that literally or...?

Don't try to rake your brain for ideas -- that never works. Just let it go. Remember the saying "A watched pot never boils"? Same concept here. The more you ...

Jiggy is right, but... well... if you're going for slang, then you want to indicate that it is a question. Why? Because the words would naturally get higher as the ...

Don't think you're alone... essays are the most awesomest thing around! And welcome! :)

Awesome. It isn't marked for deletion anymore.

how much did i love you? i counted the ways that you loved me i'll always remember the things we used to do now black and white is all i ...

Aha! Nate replied. ;) So… since I think that people actually want me to tell them what I think of their stories at the onset, I shall tell you! The ...

Also! If you do want to advertise your work here, you might want to tell the critiquers what you want them to look at specifically. That will help them a ...