Snake7

The Power of the Crystal Noctis was on the brink off falling asleep on his throne, his head rested on his hand. The back of the stone seat was connected ...

This was good! I just didn't like how it ended. It was a bit pointless and didn't really mean anything. A good peice of writing though, very detailed.

@Veritas You're completely right about it being cliche. I just joined yesterday and was looking for a short story just to get me started and this was the first thing ...

Very unusual yet creative. You are very imaginative to create such a unique story. Only criticism here would be your wording, like what someone above me wrote, you should have ...