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Re: Meeting Jesus (contes entry)
I'll start by saying you spelt contest wrong in the title. This piece is rather weird. I know it's a short story but it didn't really go anywhere. All that ...
Aug 6, 2011 -
Re: The lesser spirit
This is intresting. There's a few spelling mistakes: me to us both hands broadsword sword would every make a I'm not really sure about this sentence: Uncontrollable fear grips me, ...
Jul 9, 2011 -
Re: The speeder's web
Sorry, I didn't manage to read all of this. This is quite good from what I've read so far though. - who stood by the light switch with a gun ...
Jul 8, 2011 -
Re: Nameless
Your descriptions and wording are very good. I didn't quite get the beginning, maybe you should work on explaining it more clearly. Smoke like an octopuses tendrils caressed the distant ...
Jul 8, 2011 -
Re: The dawn thief
Very intresting. I know you speak a different language so this must be very difficult for you. Well done. Just a few things I noticed: But there place where it ...
Jul 8, 2011 -
Re: A Room for Two Knights
I didn't manage to read all of it but from what I read I thought it was OK. Like the person said above me watch you're POV. You've said things ...
Jul 8, 2011 -
Re: Adolescent Immortals
This was quite good. The first thing I thought when I saw this was the lack of PARAGRAPHS! It was just a wall of writing. I don't know if you ...
Jul 7, 2011