Smilykid

Prologue: The Prince's Convoy Prince Evan, meticulously sipped the white wine. He puckered, examining the converging flavors in his mouth. "Fine quality, Joel." Evan set the wine glass, carefully on ...

I think this story has real potential. Aurum obviously has some close relationship with this "Albino Guy" and that should be explained further in the story. I have some questions ...

Chapter 1: Mundane Quarrels Staring out into the field of bloodshed, I cannot help but think how pointless it is. The humans' screams and minotaurs' grunts travel through the iron ...

I really liked this story. It gives a futuristic twist on the ever-popular multi-race aspect of stories. But yes, I agree with Griffinkeeper that if her bounty is so high ...

I didn't see any mistakes but, I'm just wondering what the word padded means because, you seemed to use the word a lot. Also, I would advice using her name ...

I haven't read the first part of your story, but I can tell just from this, that it will be good. I catches the reader and leaves a sense of ...

Thanks for taking your time to review it! Ya I'm new so I will post a revised version and PM you. -Smilykid :)

Your writing is very rich and descriptive! I really like it. "Would it interest you to learn that there is another version of the name's origins?" I would change "version" ...

That was pretty good. Here I'll give you a review. They were sitting at are brand new, falling apart, kitchen table, drinking tea that we were supposed to be saving ...

A short story about an elf named Uruvion and his friend/ girlfriend, Niva. Enjoy! Uruvion sniffed the cold, rancid air of the night. Being an elf he had better sense ...