SkyeDreamer

Aww, I loved this! I really liked the idea that you had everything dear to you in one box, then you ended with the Bible... As a fellow Christian, I ...

I really liked this! Even though you had no punctuation, your poem was still easy to follow and flowed well... which sometimes doesn't happen. My favorite parts were: You’re so ...

I liked this poem a lot. I don't really have any critiques; I just wanted to say that this was really good. As a side note, there have been a ...

Umm... How about Bilbo Baggins (from The Hobbit )?! I mean, hello... Think about that one for a minute... it's a strange name.

If I don't, I will have no reason to be here.

Just read part 2, so nevermind my last comment! I love it!!

I loved this!!! Okay, only one thing. Maybe you should change the ending, to her new child is Jake's daughter. That would be so cute! Just wanted to say that. ...

Thank you so much for your tips, everyone!

Nice for a beginning poem, but... maybe you jumped in to the deep end too soon. :/ I liked what you were trying to do here, but it was a ...

Whoa! Where did that ending come from?! I mean that in a good way, though. I thought the descriptions were perfect, a good balance of plot and imagery. Nice work! ...

Thanks for the reviews! It was intentional, so I'm glad it kind of worked.

I liked the way you used the shoe to mean something more. Good message, and the poem was fun to read. One thing: your rhymes didn't always... well, rhyme. You ...

This was such a different poem! I have only one nitpick, and it's that you'd make nouns full sentences. examples: Close. Eyes. or Begin. Again. or (especially this one for ...

This is an interesting poem. Everyone has already pointed out most of my nitpicks, so I'll just say this is cute. I especially liked the ending! I think this poem ...

Thank you! I'm definitely going to try this. :)