SishBee

*Sure! I'll be your roomie, unless anyone else wants me? lol!*

I sat on A mat bY a cat who was faT and looked a little bit like a bat. Lol! This is fun! ~SishBee~ x

[Ray] She had been keeping herself to herself for now and was starting to wonder when the assembly was when she overheard a conversation. “So, do either of you know ...

It is hard to explain. You find a very dark room and then you leave the shutter open on the camera while you move torches, lighters, mobile phones or anything ...

name- Ray age- 15 gender- Female cast- Noble but she was adopted into ths cast and she has never felt she belongs. homeland- Calekt appearance- personality- Appears gentle and unassuming ...

Right, this is short but there is quite a lot to say. I could now feel vibrations, light at first, and then increasingly powerful. Perhaps Now I could feel vibrations. ...

I think you need to focus on the character a bit more. Also, "Miserably even" I think you meant MiserablE. :) I am now going to look at part 2... ...

I like the idea of the poem, and the message but I felt that the rhyme and rhythm were sometimes a little disjointed; although this could work because you are ...

That was good. I think you should leave the ending as it is because it is quite powerful and emphasises how quickly the relationship moved on. Certainly leave the last ...

Wow. Ok, *scans through it once more* nope, nothing wrong it is as close to perfect as is humanly possible! ~SishBee~ x

I loved the fact that you didn't put capital letters at the beginning of your lines! It made the poem flow a lot easier and well done for breaking the ...

I am not sure about this one, on the one hand I liked how it was short and suggested the speed of the relationship, on the other hand the lack ...

I agree with Snoink on the whole conflict issue. You could be trying to be subtle or trying to keep the reader guessing but since it is more like a ...

Thanks for all the comments! Glad you like it! Now... does anyone have any ideas for a title? :) ~SishBee~ x

Yes I did take it! :) I used the technique twice before taking this particular photo and they didn't work very well and since this one I have taken some ...