SishBee

Thanks, I i'll go through it again and try to iron out the kinks... In answer to your question, the reason he forgets his name is for two reasons, firstly ...

(Monologue spoken directly to camera/audience) Boy, 12 years old sat in a field, rucksack next to him, wearing jeans. It started out as a walk. That’s all it was, another ...

Haha! This brought a smile to my face after a long hour of revision... thank you. Anyway, I assume you mean 'They decided to LOOK inside the planet' rather than ...

Okay, since you have only got one other person in this... Name:Tara Alice Yates (Nickname:Tay) Gender:Female Age:20 Personality:Doesn't act her age but is reliable and trustworthy. Has a bit of ...

I really liked this, you managed to put forward quite a complex idea very well. I liked the repetition in 'You left it behind, With the girl you left behind ...

Okay, can i start by saying I loved the repetition in the last to lines *applaudes*. However, I have some minor cirticisms... 1)In the line 'Of fairy tales of yore' ...

I am sorry if you were hoping for a criticism, but it was just too good. It reminds me of a really old poem which is a rare thing. I ...

Hey! As you may have guessed, I am new here. I hope you like the stuff I write, but even if you don't then just leave a helpful comment... :) ...