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Re: Blue Steam
Try not to put extra info or it could not work out well next time. But this time it was pretty good. So don't push anymore information than you need ...
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Re: There's Something Wrong Me*
I love it. This is great the only thing is commas and periods. I also have a bad time with them too. Don't feel awkward. keep writing.
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Re: The Experiment (Chapter 1)
Not bad but can use some work. I agree with GryphonFledgling on this one. Fix the grammar errors and you will be ok b ut some other problems are nawkwardness ...
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Re: My Muse be Cenci!
This isn't the best I had read. No offense of course but the grammar here is poor and some of the lines don't make sense. Try to make them to ...
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: Thoughts on 'Why?'
Sometimes I do the same thing. This was good. Nothing to critique here. Great Job!
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: The Cherry Tree (chap. 2)
Very good. But my preference is the first chapter so far. Nothing much to critique here awesome job.
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: Fifteen Eternal Candles (Chapter 1, Scene 5)
Not bad but i agree with kittykat on this one try to work on your grammar. That is one big problem in writing. Trust me I know. Hope this helps!
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: Ahoy Insanity #1
I haven't found anything to critique in this except so common grammar errors but thats no problem Easy fix! Great story Keep up the good writing
Jan 6, 2008 -
Re: Young Love
There is nothing to critique here it was good. Keep writing
Jan 5, 2008 -
Re: Paper clips and rubber bands
This isn't to shabby. LOL I wish i could hear how it goes. If you ever make a video of this song let me know. Would love to hear it ...
Jan 5, 2008 -
Re: Fade away
Wow Very emotional but good. I am being a true critque here I hope i am not being offenses or anything. I don't mean to if you take critisism that ...
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Re: I Am poetry
I like it really I do. I only have one thing to say the first sentence is confusing It says "your name: just call me ... A." What is your ...
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Re: I hate Life
The poem is confusing I know because I wrote it. But it isn't terrible like ya'll said. Its just differnent. I agree on some of the critique but not all. ...
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Re: I am a rose not a thorn
I am a rose not a thorn Roses are beautiful Thorns are not. I am a rose not a thorn Roses are a gorgeous red. Thorns are dull and boring ...
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Re: Midnight
I was sitting on my bed I couldn't fall asleep I was watching TV Untill midnight started to creep I got exceptionally scared And then I heard a sound I ...
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