SimonCowellLuver

I like it fiorst off thank you for making it easy to read because some stories are really hard to read because there are no spaces in between paragraphs. Also ...

I am here to say that your story was ok but cliche. Also the picture was a little odd for a moment there. Kind of creepy.LOL Well i think you ...

I like this it is very well planned and written. It must of taken awhile for you to think of it. Did it take you awhile to put this together? ...

Hey. I am saying that the story was kind of hard to read so can you double space paragraphs. Ok next thing i really liked it. But if you don't ...

Hello. Ok let me get to the nitty gritty ok. This is good but a little much cliche. But I hate the reptition of the lines though. That is my ...

Wow! i have to say. It is a lot to take in man. It is way to cliche. I like it but it is cliche. I think you should change ...

That's it! I can't take it no more I hate it... here I want to leave right now! No one come close to me Its at your own risk Because ...

You have been writing a lot of poems lately and i haven't that is because i am saving my points. I really like it but like what miyaviloves said that ...

[quote="SkaterPunk2011"][u][b]Stone Cold[/b][/u] His hands felt of concrete, as they traced along my back. Shivers of cold ran down my spine. Trying to gasp for the air slipping away. Holding on ...

i like this it is great. All you have to do is add punctionuation to it. Even though it is a poem in stanza form it needs commas,periods, etc. But ...

This was a cool storty to read. i don't have a lot to say bout it because it was good. There is nothing really wrong with this. TTYL SimonCowellLuver

like liz said tjis can be a strong poem. Only if you make it to be it that way. I think it was a very indeed good poem. I think ...

Nah It isn't my type of story. i think it is long and drawn out. If you want to make a story like this make it fun and adventorous(sorry if ...

I agree with them abocve it was a really good piece to read. Careful of the commas and placing them. I always have trouble with that also so your not ...

Hi I am gothgirl originally but i changed my name. I like what you got here it is a little depressing and cliche but isn't bad at all. Eat this ...