SimonCowellLuver

A swirling mass of dejections Printed on the window in the stain Of forgotten hands, smearing the light. A harmful shame, pouring from the Mouths of feckless youths, Pushes and ...

Wow Jab! This poem is great. I don't have really anything else to say but it was excellent. Good Job. Keep Up The Good Work!! SimonCowellLuver

[quote="thebadthing"]Sweet, delicate face Eat me with a glance Extending arms so rough Feel through my curves I crave you You I need you Trace me with your tounge of tang ...

i was a god with a cup of wine in my fingers, as i twirled and twirled it, feeling the slow vibration in my fingertips Alright you need some help ...

Its ok but it is good for a short poem. yeah i know what i said didn't make sense but its ok. I think you can tell much more than ...

I like what you got here but it is pretty vague. It is ok but it needs help in aliging the poem so below i had an idea so here ...

My mothers love alright add a period here. Holds me tight, Wont let me go, Though allows me flight. I breathe easy add a period here also. Though I’m held ...

[quote="Stephixy"][pre]Devastated heart, lost in pain: Warmed and awoken once again. Smiles and laughter coincide, She loved him back, hard to hide. Ok I have to say this but if you ...

this is kind of vague. Tell me more than what you got. The first stanza was great but then they kept on decling in length untill no more. Come on! ...

Sorry to be harsh here but i wouldn't call this a poem. Nope not at all. i would call it a short story written in poem form. You might not ...

Aww cute nice drawing. Your better than i am that's for sure lol. Have a greatt day ^ _^

Your first stanza needs puctiionuation fixing so do the others. After getting past that you are good to go. Great Job!! SimonCowellLuver

[quote="Lynlyn"]Did you walk here once, on these cobblestones? Did you stand in this place and see the halo of damp sun collected at the edges of ivory Apollo's form? This ...

You don't really have a good structure in this poem. Also add some punctionuation or it seems to be one long ridiculous sentence. I'm sorry but that is what it ...

Exhaustion swept across Aedomir like a veil of fog. Sleep was not the problem, sickness was. His emotions, he could not present to Seridon. Death lingered obdurately at the back ...