Silverstar

I read it, and I see where you're trying to go but... I don't get a feel for the characters. The dialogue seems very forced, in most places, and in ...

And that 500-word contest, I was offering it to you Whoops! :oops: Silly me. Thank you both for your helpful comments- I tweaked it a bit more and it is ...

Thanks for the crit! It's been a big help. :wink: Okay, I've edited it (and think it much improved.) This time it ended up ight on 200 words. And you ...

Okay. So I'm entering a contest at the local newspaper for writing a scary story. The catch is that the deadline is two days from now and I found out ...

Crit coming soon... :D And here it is! Okay. Spelling and grammar seems to have been attended to by other reviewers, so I'll go ahead with the basic story and ...

I loved this. Always been a fan of stuff like this. About the foreword- The main thing I had a problem with here was excessive use of commas, which kind ...

Good to see more of this story. Keep it up! I noticed that in the first part you put a line between paragraphs, but discontinued it after a while. this ...

Good luck on Nano! I didn't have the courage or the willpower to do it this year. :D Maybe next year.

Nice story, from waht I can see. Elves are always good! Try to look through, I see a number of commas where there should be periods. ~ Coriacan, a young ...

Oh, I loved that book! Unfortunately, the library only had the first two of the trilogy... which is murder. Very funny. Stars are cool. Marark didn't vlaim to be king.. ...

*thunderous applause* Reichieru, that was very aptly put, exactly how I feel. However, it is an insult to geniuses when this book is compared with the greatest works of fanatsy ...

See. Amatuerish writing, really amatuerish plotting. He shouldn't have been published. He should have had more time to develop his writing, not publishing the first finish piece of writing he ...

How I always do it (the only way that seems to work)i s double space paragraphs. Like so. Before: After the lunch rush had subsided, Cid's wicked stepmother barged into ...

The Lord of the Rings by JRR Tolkien is not a book written for children or young adult. Its original audience was intended for adults, unlike the Hobbit. It was ...

but the lord of the rings isn't i think people are only reading them because of the movies. Excuse me? Anyone who truly likes the series likes them for the ...