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Re: With Every Breath There is a Dying Wish
No problem :)
Aug 18, 2011 -
Re: Worldly Desires
"Too terrible"? "Too terrible" ??? Honey, this is a gorgeous poem! The imagery is beautiful and vivid, and the message is very different to a lot of the poetry you ...
Aug 18, 2011 -
Re: With Every Breath There is a Dying Wish
This is a great mini-story, and I know how hard it is to write something well with such as small word limit! (Goodness knows I can't do it!) I only ...
Aug 18, 2011 -
Re: Wedding Night Well-Wishes? (Short Short Memoir)
I really liked your story, lots of great description :) It's a good length, too, because it stops before her thinking processes start to get a little repetitive or boring. ...
Aug 17, 2011 -
Re: Unforgiving
Hi AngelKnight900 :) I thought that this poem was really interesting, and had some wonderful lines full of imagery. The message behind it was touching and poignant, and just really ...
Aug 17, 2011 -
Re: You ( The inside of you
Hi preachergirl18! I liked your poem a lot, it has a lot of emotion behind it. However, you did make a few spelling/grammar mistakes :( You perfect in every way ...
Aug 17, 2011 -
Re: Where the Heart Is
Hey there :) First of all, I loved this story! It was bittersweet and beautiful. I especially liked how the memory of the berry bushes is linked back in at ...
Aug 17, 2011 -
Re: Liar Liar, Heart on Fire
Liar, liar, Heart on fire, Tell me what you really feel. Liar, liar, Heart on fire, What is fake and what is real? You tell me that you never cared, ...
Aug 8, 2011 -
Re: BloodLust
It drips down walls and Covers the floors and Spreads the scent of Coppery rust. It fills our eyes with Truth and lies, makes Everything else just Turn to dust. ...
Aug 3, 2011 -
Re: Journeying Through my Mind
Haha, I actually really liked the slightly offbeat rhythm! It seemed to fit the topic, making your mind sound a bit offbeat itself. The one thing that I picked up ...
Aug 3, 2011 -
Re: Prologue: Storm Clouds
Hey there :) This is a wonderful prologue, and I certainly hope that you post more! As the reviewer above me said, your descriptive language is great. I especially like ...
Aug 2, 2011 -
Re: The playground is burning
I really liked this - the tense made it kind or creepy, like it was from the point of view of someone who knew what was going to happened, but ...
Aug 2, 2011 -
Re: The singing game
Cemeteries of London (Coldplay) What do we do now?
Aug 2, 2011 -
Re: Boys in PE
Hey there :) First of all, I absolutely love this poem! It's full to bursting (in a good way) with gorgeous imagery that really works. I especially love the lines ...
Aug 2, 2011 -
Re: War of Contradiction
She's hyperactivity, Strange intensity, Fisted hands and Burning eyes. A contradiction of passion and logic. Sees the world as a rainbow of black, grey and white. Razor-sharp smiles and butter-soft ...
Aug 1, 2011
