SilentRain

Very good poem!! I think that if you add comas and periods it will flow a little better and be easier to read... I move as wind in the leaves ...

I like this, It is a nice poem and it reminds me of how my little sister writes... Love is hard Hard like a stone A stone easy to hold ...

Hello, Well, I like the poem but the way you formated it just makes it hard to read. I lay in bed, Watching. I look at the flying bird outside ...

Hello, This is a great poem! I like how you but the idea that you can be beautiful outside but horrid on the inside, I have a few suggestions though... ...

I like this poem. I like the words. But it reads like a paragraph, I think that if you format it like a poem it will read more like a ...

There is a door before me left slightly ajar, through the crack I see the other side. Home awaits me from behind this open door. The passageway is open, but ...

Well, I like the topic, I think that if you made it rhyme or changed some words to make it have better rhythm it may be eaiser to read... I ...

Have you ever felt afraid? Afraid to go home? Because your daddy beats your step-mom? Because your afraid to face him, after begging him to stop? Have you ever felt ...

This house is NOT a home inward struggles plague every room with tragedies of there own some are shared but too many left unknown An angry father that can’t understand ...

I really like this poem! It is truthful and tells about how alot of people feel but are to prideful to admit... I like the last line of the last ...

I like this poem, it is sad but strong, I don't really see many mistakes but I do wonder, What is this person running from, is it there life, or ...

Wow! :D this is great!! expesaly for your first poem!!! I really like how you use all you sences to describe the forbide love!!! It's great!!! :smt003

I don’t want life to be easy I want the chaos and the rain I want the insanity even if it brings pain I don’t want to feel numb I ...

Cold Steel bites my white flesh little red lines bubble spilling over dripping crimson relief releasing all at once years of remorse regret and anguish but as the physical pain ...

I think that this could be better... I like the theme. I think that you should write the second stanza differantly, I had trouble getting it when I was reading ...