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Re: Tense
Hello! I'm Rain, I think, despite what yourspoiler has said, that this has potentional! Its accully quite good. One problem I noticed though is that you used the same words ...
Oct 27, 2011 -
Re: The Suns Betrayal
The rain falls down, its acid sorrows, burning through my skin, and leaving holes in my soul. The weather must have been an omen, telling us to be ready for ...
Oct 21, 2011 -
Re: No name
Hello, So as has been stated you need to make this longer. Of what you have written the only thing I can comment on is that the last line is ...
Oct 21, 2011 -
Re: Asymmetrical Confrontation
Wow! I really like this! Fits my mood really well. I really like how you personified the excuses. I cant really do much of a review because this is really ...
Oct 21, 2011 -
Re: A Life Through Sad Eyes
There’s a cute little girl in a light blue tee, full of bright smiles, looks as happy as can be. But look a little closer, deep within her eyes, what ...
Oct 21, 2011 -
Re: As We Are Now
Hello :) I'm SilentRain, I haven't done a review in a while but I will do my best. :) To start wil, I like your title, its what made me ...
Sep 22, 2011 -
Re: Needs Title!
Has my love left me? Moved on to more promising people? Found a new love to hold her hand? I feel so alone, Another day done by, Without the percence ...
Apr 11, 2011 -
Re: I have darkness in my veins.
So, this is pretty good! I love the emotion behind it and the stoy of it. Though reading it, a few lines don't really sound right, and you really need ...
Apr 11, 2011 -
Re: Submit to the Young Writers Literary Journal! (closed)
Okay, so, if you haven't been notified that doesn't mean you didn't get in? If so... Yay! I still have a chance!
Apr 11, 2011 -
Re: The Foolish Tool
I like the poem a lot, but the puncuation is a little off. I Heres my review, Red- Grammar errors Blue- My suggestions Purple- Little comments :) Just a step ...
Apr 11, 2011 -
Re: Submit to the Young Writers Literary Journal! (closed)
Ya, but an eailer post said that everyone would be notified by the 10th and it is the 11th...
Apr 11, 2011 -
Re: Submit to the Young Writers Literary Journal! (closed)
If you haven't been notify does that mean you didn't get in???????
Apr 11, 2011 -
Re: Paths to Righteousness
So I really didn't rewlly do any editing, and I really don't know if I even like it... Nothing can ever really be the same again not after you encounter ...
Apr 8, 2011 -
Re: Counting the Stars
I’ll stay up all night, And wait for your call; I’ll count the stars on the ceiling, And wait for one to fall. I’ll catch it in my hands, And ...
Mar 9, 2011 -
Re: Submit to the Young Writers Literary Journal! (closed)
How do you track your entree with that code thingy??? ~Rain~
Feb 14, 2011