SilentRain

Hello :) Rain here, Grammar errors- RED Things I thing should change- BLUE Things I liked- PURPLE Other questions/comments- GREEN Could you just say “I ' m here”

Hi :) I'm Rain. I'm not really hear to tell you how to improve this, because this kind of poem needs no improvements. I am here though, to tell you ...

Hello :) I'm Rain, I like your descriptions very good, but I think you should put the picture in a spoiler, so the reader can read your poem and then ...

A little poem I wrote in about 10 minutes, in needs work, any suggestions?? I feel as if life passes me by Each and everyday Because each and every day ...

Hello :) I like the poem, but in some places your rhyme seems somewhat forced, and that messes up the flow. An island I built, to hold myself, A lofty ...

This is really really good. I wasn't expecting this. So much raw emotion. Its briliant! I my self believe that the best works of art come from emotional rants. My ...

Looks like this is the second review I'm doing for you today :) I really liked this I liked the structure, though it was a littlte weird to get used ...

I agree with IamHathor, I think this needs more, its kind of an introduction waiting for the story to explain it. I like the beginning of this but toward the ...

Hello! I like how you invertend your sentences in this, it makes it sound a little wierd but to people who haven't read many things written like that, if that ...

Oh Mii God!!! I love it!!! :)) I LOVE Alice In Wonderland! That may cause a little bias but oh well I find this great :) Though I did notice ...

Another old poem still unsure if it needs work... I don't have a name yet I am called by many I don't have a face yet may paintings are done ...

I started writing this about two years ago and it has just been sitting collecting dust, as it is I'm not to sure about it, I know it needs a ...

Wow, for the firt poem you wrote this is really good :) I wish I could give you advice but it seems as if you need none, good job! Keep ...

Okay, so I wrote this in a five min rant and I'm not sure about how it is, whether it is good or not, so any suggestions and comments would ...

Hi :) I was wondering if you could review either of this two poems