SilentOllie

“Emily! Hurry up honey; you need to get ready for school! As in now!” Groaning I sluggishly hit my alarm for what was it, the third time? Sitting up, I ...

Lights, flashes, and people were crammed into the display area. Berkly stood staring out at his audience with an eerie calmness and detatchment. Mr. Kaisha stood by on the platform ...

This poem, really surprised me I have to say. When I first saw the title. I thought it'd be about something 'happier' then what you described and said instead. The ...

Not sure some of the lines should have been as short as they were, and with the way you have this punctuated almost makes it feel kind of jerky, which ...

During a dark quiet night With a small burning light Way up in the atmosphere I look, and find they are so pure. A twinkle in the velvet night, So ...

This poem has a nice depth of emotion and feeling to it, but I find the rhythum- and flow to it is a bit off- and that made it harder ...

Your eyes bore into me as we sit The table between us,such a vast distance. The lines in the wood go on forever. You seem so far away, and yet ...

This poem was...interesting =D It told a nice story, but not the most original I've read/heard. However, I'm one of those people that never get bored of the "Cinderella Story..." ...

Aw...this poem really spoke to me. The sweetness, and almost the tone of innocence shone through. It was simple, and there weren't any complications, and I don't question what you ...

Alright! Yep yep, thank you! ^.^ I really appreciate your critique and such- so thank you! :D

You call me your Sunshine, The one who brings you a happiness no other has matched. But I can’t see why I am a Sunshine. I don’t glow, I don’t ...

This poem portrays a romantic, and sweet setting in my mind when I read it. I like the last part when it talks about how they walk side by side ...

Oh dear, well I'm just saying ahead of time- I dont want to sound like a party pooper, but the Twilight Series aren't the "best books ever written" or such. ...

Your three haiku's are very simple, and sweet. The last one- about how nature cannot be captured in three lines made me smile. Because it's true- and yet people try, ...

L-o-v-e has a strong emotional feeling to it when I read it. However, some of the word choices- like when saying "I’m not a first timer at this.but it feels ...