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Wow. This is amazing. Really powerful. I love how you captured those moments before death so perfectly.

*Speechless* That was amazing. Very emotional, very powerful . . . wow. I couldn't find anything i didn't love about it.

Wow. This is amazing. I'm dying to know more. Who is the MC? Who are they trying to bring back? So many questions.... PLEASE tell me if you make this ...

Awesome, greenfreak101! My critiques/comments: *You need a little help with grammar. Lots o' periods. *I liked your story line, it was very engaging, and i enjoyed reading it. *i love ...

Very good. I only have a few nitpicks. *I think your characters need to be a little more 3D. They are people. They have fears, likes, dislikes. Make them real!!! ...

Wonderful, Ranger Hawk.I'm a real sucker for medeival stuff (swords, castles, armor, ahhhhhh...) and this really caught my interest. I think you could make your MC's personality more apparent, but ...

Very good, although your grammar could use a little touching-up. I like your general idea, even if it is a little bloody. Keep on writing!

oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooh, wonderful ending! I loved reading it. This sounds like the prologue to a novel or something. I kind of feel bad for the little boy....

Ooooooooooooooh, what happened!?!??!?!?!?!?!?!? I am DYING to read more!!! What happened to Kyla? Was the beginning a dream? This radiates awesomeness. i Must read more.

AWESOME!!! I actually felt sad when i read the last sentence. I knew nothing about the MC, but her death makes me sad. i like that. I really like that. ...

I really like this. I liked how your characters meet each other, and i like the 'love at first sight' thing. I loved how the beginning drew me in, and ...