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Wonderful! I read the original, and this is definitely better. I would love to read more.

Wow. This is amazing. Really powerful. I love how you captured those moments before death so perfectly.

Wonderful, BreenaJames! You said in your intro-thingy that this is the prologue to something, and if you are going to post anymore, please tell me!! I really enjoyed this, it ...

Whoa. This is one of the best things i've read on here. Nitpicks/comments: *No nitpicks. I haven't been in a real haunted house for years, but i think you captured ...

Very good, Forestqueen808! I have a few comments/nitpicks: *Wouldn't the sheriff be a little more suspicious of Ivy? And wouldn't he want to know why she was wearing a cloak ...

*Speechless* That was amazing. Very emotional, very powerful . . . wow. I couldn't find anything i didn't love about it.

I am speechless. That was awesome. I do have a few nitpicks/comments: * “My name was Robert,” he chuckled softly through what I believed were tears Umm, i think its ...

Wow. This piece was amazing, Earthfire713. I loved how you wove in the background story without being distracting or out of place. I liked how this could take place a ...

Wow. This is amazing. I'm dying to know more. Who is the MC? Who are they trying to bring back? So many questions.... PLEASE tell me if you make this ...

Wonderful, LightTiger10!! I like the idea of the assassins, and i love how your MC is obviously a trained fighter. However, what is the plot? Who is the MC? Why ...

Just so you know, this is bloody. If you don't like that kind of stuff, don't read any farther. This is also part of a novel, but i don't know ...

Wow, Ranger Hawk. I LOVED this!!! As I surveyed the room more closely, my gaze fell upon something that made me positively gape. I find this a little awkward. Maybe ...

I LOVE Percy Jackson!!!!!! This was wonderfully true to the books, and i loved how Annabeth and Percy interacted. It was soooo like them. I have no nitpicks, except i ...

This is part if the second chapter of the novel i'm writing, and i'm somewhat reluctant to let anyone look at this. It may not completely make sense, because it ...

Awesome, greenfreak101! My critiques/comments: *You need a little help with grammar. Lots o' periods. *I liked your story line, it was very engaging, and i enjoyed reading it. *i love ...