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Re: Angels - Prologue
Oooh, this was wonderful!! I definitely want to read more. The entire thing was absolutely wonderful. I have no nitpicks what so ever. Sparkles, Sierra
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: The History of Time
Tick, tick, tick. The frail old man stares, waiting, at the clock. The hand moves slowly, taunting him I love this sentence. . It is saying, “Time is against you, ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: 3 months, 21 days, 7 hours
Wow. This was just . . . wow. It was wonderful. I loved the emotion and the description. I agree with theotherone, that the last sentence was a kind of ...
Dec 20, 2010 -
Re: I Am the Girl of the Moon
Hi!! I just love the idea behind this!!! I Am the Girl of the Moon I lie back on my crescent hammock As it drifts on through the sky, Swung ...
Dec 18, 2010 -
Re: She will never know - A lost love.
Oooh, this was really good. Very dramatic. I loved the raw emotion. Remember to capitalize the first letter of every sentence, not just the first letter of every stanza. Sierra
Dec 17, 2010 -
Re: Crush
[flash=][/flash] Just wondering, what is this supposed to be? I would really prefer friends not to tell secrets that are personal and important , but , having friends who love ...
Dec 17, 2010 -
Re: Rain
Behold, my first short story from after NaNoWriMo!!! I'm a bit rusty, so please do not rip this to tiny little pieces. Medium pieces are good. So are large pieces. ...
Dec 17, 2010 -
Re: Reap Your Rewards
Oooh, I really liked this! Very bitter and dramatic. I do have a few critiques. The slip of your tonge It's spelled 'tongue', and I think you should add some ...
Dec 17, 2010 -
Re: My Soul Mate
Wow. Just wow. This was awesome. You nailed the emotions very well. Keep writing :)
Dec 16, 2010 -
Re: The Most Disturbing Book...
I think Hunger, by Michael Grant, was pretty disturbing. In a subtle way.
Dec 5, 2010 -
Re: Nostalgia
Wow. This is amazing!! I love the emotion and your writing style is wonderful.
Dec 5, 2010 -
Re: Boulevard of Broken Dreams
Awesome, Nixy!! Me thinks i know what the inspiration for this is :) I love the part 'I am banished to this boulevard, the Boulevard of Broken Dreams' !!! I ...
Dec 5, 2010 -
Re: Rollercoaster
This is just a little something i came up with at a carnival today :smt003 Enjoy! :smt002 “Are you sure you want to go on?” I asked her anxiously as ...
Oct 11, 2010 -
Re: Fragile Things: Chapter One
This is the first chapter of a novel i'm currently working on. This is the total first draft, so it's pretty rough, and i don't know how much sense it ...
Oct 10, 2010 -
Re: Hello, my name is...
Hello, my name is Chance, and i'm trying not to kill you right now. Hello, my name is Lila, and i'm your worst nightmare.
Oct 5, 2010
